1. The lead is way too long. (2 pts)
2. Wedding should be marriage (2pts)https://celebrity.yahoo.com/blogs/celeb-news/oops-hayden-panettiere-takes-a-tumble-on-tricky-met-gala-red-carpet-192024346.html
3. "is that" should be replaced with (because). (2 pts)
http://www.theconfessionsofahairstylist.com
4. 100% should be spelled out to read (100 percent). (2pts)
http://www.theconfessionsofahairstylist.com
5. There should be a comma after "person". (2pts)
Instead should be lowercase. (2pts)
+10 points
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